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Discussion in 'Media' started by kkbubble, Feb 24, 2015.

  1. kkbubble

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    Hello cubecraft forum browsers! some of you may remember me, kkbubble. A few months back I made my very own "farewell" thread when i said that i am "quitting" CCG. This thread is not related to that at all, in fact it's about something completely different. I need your guys's help.

    I never liked school, I hate it in fact. Long ago I started feeling like college wasn't for me. I don't want to perpetuate a systemI dislike. I have however, always enjoyed writing. Recently I decided to start writing a book, my "out" of college.

    I already have the main arc of the plot mapped out, and three major characters and a few minor characters. However I soon learned that writing a book was not nearly as easy I would have thought, /Irony. I have written quite a bit so far, around 15 pages on word i'd like to say? Much of it is unfinished as of yet. I only have around 4 chapters, and there is a lot of revision to do. In addition I need outside opinion. My friends and family are a good start, but i need more. A sample size akin to that of a realistic audience for books. Then it hit me. I have a huge sample size of people on these forums, and many of them know me well. I remember that there is a wide age variety, boys and girls, people from all around the world, here. And so here is the request i ask of you guys. I would like to post small bits of my project on here, up to a chapter at a time. Since it could be quite long, I'll post a link to a site where you can view it, so it doesn't take up pages on here. If you would be willing to read it, and post feedback, I'd be so grateful. post anything related to the book, your opinions, your predictions, anything. I highly encourage nit picking! point out any contradictions you see!

    If this is advertising, or not allowed than I am very sorry, and will not do this, just please tell me now :).

    Just as a forewarning this might be too complicated for some of our younger readers, in addition there is detailed battle scenes that some might find disturbing. Also there are quite a few Biblical references, i'll post a short description of what they mean with with the link. I will try to post on fridays, if ether is a change in schedule i'll update it in my status. And last but not least, thank you all.




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    Have you tried using Pastebin?
     
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    whats that?
     
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    It's a site where you copy/type something and you then post it. It's used for a variety of reasons such as

    1. Sharing code(Primary Reason)
    2. Sharing Notes to a project
    3. Sharing Stories.
    4. Announcements

    A good example was Notch's Letter that he was leaving Mojang which he posted on pastebin.
    Notch's farwell letter: http://pastebin.com/n1qTeikM

    If you don't feel this is for you, you could make a uneditable, Publicly viewable Google Document (Provided you have a google account). If you don't feel this is your fancy either, you could always do a quick online search.
     
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    ah thank you :) it's perfect.
     
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    Would you like harsh criticism or 30 people saying 'oh this is cewl, awesome, blah blah blah' or light suggestions? It's really a question of how seriously you want to take this writing. We can give general support and 'oh cool' for minor interest or very honest (and most likely heavy) criticism to make you extremely good at writing.
     
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    theres no point to this if i don't learn anything. throw all your criticism at me. if i can't take constructive criticism than i should consider a new line of work, eh?
     
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    Alright, so you're taking this seriously as a line of work? Have you talked to your English teachers at school and such as well?
     
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    And just going to warn you, some criticism is going to be extremely harsh. Personally, I'm not because I'm just born and am relatively passive but there are others that are just naturally aggressive. Just a warning so be prepared ;) I'll still give as much feedback as possible tho :) (although I'm mainly a technical grammatical cohesion type critic)
     
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    in the end, all i need is the harsh stuff :)
     
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    Kk post it whenever
     
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    Im posting on fridays
     
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    That makes books in my opinion even better! If you want to read a book to give you suggestions for other things I would read the Left Behind series by Jerry Jenkins. But I think that this is amazing that you are making your own book, I really would love to read your book and I hope the best!
     
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    Thanks man
     
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    Wattpad is good fyi


    "Detailed battle scenes" "gruesome"
    What more could I expect from you :,)
     
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    don judge, k?
     
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    Good luck with your writing. Would love to see the start of your story anytime soon. :)
     
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    I used to use wattpad :3
     
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    You know I'll never judge you, seen weirder c:
     
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    How is a battle scene that weird though?